Sprinklepills!

Sprinklepills!
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Comedy
2023

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Pitch a difficult project to investors, July 17, 2023

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In this brief Twine game, written for the Neo Twiny Jam in 500 words or less, you play as an inventor who is pitching their project, Sprinklepills!

The game is pretty short, with only an option or two, but presents a whole story from start to finish in a way many of the other jam entries fail to do.

I liked that the story could be read a few different ways; as stoic heroicism in the face of doubt (like The Pursuit of Happyness), as a goofball story of a whacky inventor, or as a deluded individual.

Overall, there's nothing wrong with this story, but I feel like it has a lot of features that could be dialed up. There's some good writing, but it has the potential for being great; the plot is interesting, but could be engaging, etc. So I look forward to future works from this author, but feel like this won't be their greatest work.

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Lance Cirone, July 18, 2023 - Reply
Thanks for the kind words! I definitely have more fleshed-out stories in the works that I'm excited to share. One thing I've noticed with Sprinklepills!'s reception is that people tend to have different interpretations as to what the story's about, which I didn't intend. But I think this is a testament to the applicability of art as a whole, and how everyone can find their own meanings in it.

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