Sprinklepills!

Sprinklepills!
by Lance Cirone profile

Comedy
2023

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- Edo, August 31, 2023

2 of 2 people found the following review helpful:

Pitch a difficult project to investors, July 17, 2023

by MathBrush
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In this brief Twine game, written for the Neo Twiny Jam in 500 words or less, you play as an inventor who is pitching their project, Sprinklepills!

The game is pretty short, with only an option or two, but presents a whole story from start to finish in a way many of the other jam entries fail to do.

I liked that the story could be read a few different ways; as stoic heroicism in the face of doubt (like The Pursuit of Happyness), as a goofball story of a whacky inventor, or as a deluded individual.

Overall, there's nothing wrong with this story, but I feel like it has a lot of features that could be dialed up. There's some good writing, but it has the potential for being great; the plot is interesting, but could be engaging, etc. So I look forward to future works from this author, but feel like this won't be their greatest work.

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Indeed, what it says, July 14, 2023

by MasterDungeon

Exactly what it says on the tin, a invention without a purpose, and hence if you want to convince a investor, he has to be just as purposeless. The ones the story sets you up with are not. Silly you. You played to win.