This game was written for the Neo Twiny Jam in 500 words or yes. It actually had a pretty cool setup and I liked the structure and where the story was going. Unfortunately, it had some broken logic that made multiple errors appear on most pages on both Chrome and Firefox.
Seems like the only thing missing here is more Twine expertise. With some more practice with the code, this game could be great (or the next one the author makes). Right now, I don't think it's finishable, though.