For Lila

Fun, concise experience with a clever early twist. There are some distracting typos, and I would have liked a slightly longer, more fully fleshed out game with a few more choices, but it was neat to play. The choices affect the story, and there are multiple paths to take, with the likely first "route" for most players leaving a lot of interesting questions to be answered by their subsequent playthrough.

This is the author's first game. I'm giving it 2 stars right now but it could easily be 3 or 4 stars with just a few small touches, if the author wanted to revisit it.

This is a short branching games with some neat tricks including colored text, briefly timed text, and a countdown timer in at least one part.

You are on a train, contemplating your beloved child named Lila, when a visitor comes and surprises you. The game reveals that (full spoilers) (Spoiler - click to show)you are a vampire, and this stranger is set on killing you.

I like the setup, and there are real choices. On the other hand, the game is really short, and there are a lot of typos that detract from the game. In Twine there's an option at the top to print out a 'proofing copy' of the game that's one text that you can run through a spellchecker; doing that would improve this game quite a bit.

I definitely like the author's storytelling ability and think that they're already doing great at writing, and I'd be happy to play another game by them.

This choicegame is pretty short, with a few options. Picking the wrong options takes you to a bad endings, while picking the right options (the more peaceful or moral approaches) will take you to the good ending. If you hit a bad endings, you get the chance to try again.

You could probably finish this in ten minutes even if you were looking to find all the different outcomes. The writing is slightly rough. Still, I'll probably echo the other reviews about this being a solid first attempt and encourage the writer to keep going.