for the sake of illuminating the movements of my thoughts

by Finny profile

2012
Twine

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Justice?, January 6, 2014
by Simon Deimel (Germany)

The text is quite abstract and makes you think about it, and there is surely some truth behind it, but the excessive use of metaphors has an effect of disadvantage on me: it lets the arguments become blurry. Maybe a philosophical statement (and justice is a philosophic topic) would have more impact without many metaphors. So language may be created in a sense of beauty, but its message may be partly lost or misinterpreted as an unwanted side effect. Nevertheless it is sometimes enjoyable to read the thoughts of someone else.

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finluiniel, February 2, 2014 - Reply
thank you for your review. i'm new to ifdb and to any critique of my work in general. so your thoughts are appreciated. i'd like to find that sweet spot between inner and outer worlds, something i've been working on in my non-interactive fiction. the best piece i think i've done is actually an incredibly short piece: http://ellipticallydirect.com/?p=2886
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