Glass Jar

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Creepy but not interactive, July 25, 2015
This is a short story told in second-person in Twine. There is no interaction since the only link on each page leads to the next page. The writing is good and the subject matter is suitably creepy. Since there is no interaction, perhaps it might have worked a little better in first person, since I really didn't identify with the protagonist.

Could have been better perhaps if(Spoiler - click to show) the protagonist were texting to *you* as the older unknown forum friend and you had choices of what to say back and a bit of decision whether the ending that occurs actually happens or not. Because essentially this is a turnaround of "stranger danger/beware people online" where a character is tricked into helping someone who is frightened and doesn't realize that is bait pulling them into their own trap.

Recommended if you have 20 minutes and would enjoy a weird horror story which is both subtly explicit and still manages to leave quite a bit to the imagination.

An unsettling epistolary work, June 30, 2016
He's been stalking you again. He knows where you live. Your only hope now is through this forum. Through the one person still on this forum.

Glass Jar is a short work of dynamic fiction. Its brevity serves it well, keeping it from becoming melodramatic, as well as setting up for the subsequent reveal. The twist was similar to the type of story one might find on /r/nosleep - gory, disturbing and plumbing familiar depths of depravity. It's put together well, although the premise might not be to everyone's tastes.