I've rated this game on my 5 point scale:
Polish: The red color on the choices is a nice effect, but typos and grammar problems drag this point down.
Descriptiveness: Very good! Lots of vivid images here.
Interactivity: The available choices felt pretty satisfying, especially for such a short game!
Emotional Impact: The shortness and over-the-top-ness limited the emotional impact for me.
Would I play again?: I tried all the options, and I think I've seen everything I need to here.
Edit: Overall, I would say that all of the problems could be fixed by having more time. As a Speed-IF, this is good!