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9 of 12 people found the following review helpful:An extremely long fanfic-style dark fantasy story , February 2, 2021
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Tim, December 9, 2020 - Reply
I have to say, as someone who hails from CYS, You're quite a bit misinformed about how we operate over there.
The first, and probably most egregious error, is the mention of a "school shooter" category. This is just false. We previously had a "school-based" category, for stories set exclusively in schools or other places of learning. Clearly, being so specific in setting, it was the weakest category and subject for deletion, and one of our admins jokingly made a thread prompting us to "Shoot up the school-based category", reviewing the scarcely-played games so that they would either be moved to the "Modern Adventure" Category, or be deleted in accordance with our review score rules. I'm guessing that you glanced at the forum, saw the title of the thread, and just assumed that we had a whole category dedicated to school shootings, an even more specific setting than what was actually there.
Either way, the category is gone and replaced with the "Dark Fantasy" category, which should be filling up soon with the recent contest entries.
Secondly, not every story features rape and incest. I believe that's a minor trait only rarely found outside of Endmaster's stories, which AI Dungeon seemed to mostly be relying on considering the repeated instances of his original characters.
Third, as you probably could already tell, CYS is not all that strict. Not just when it comes to typos and grammer. See, at SCP and COG, things have to appear somewhat professional, being that SCP is supposed to be a psuedo-scientific site and COG is trying to sell your stories. Since CYS is a free, online source of user-made interactive fiction, we don't really care if your story is presentable. You made the story, and every man is entitled to the sweat of his brow, as they say. But it's your job to make us care.
Sure, you COULD create a story with an absurd amount of typos and grammar mistakes, that features rape and incest in poor taste, go on ahead. Nobody's stopping you. But it's probably not going to be reviewed very well by your fellow users, and will most likely be taken down with our aforementioned review score rules. You're free to make whatever story you want, but you must accept the consequences of doing so, including constructive criticism. If it's bad, you'll know where you can improve for next time. If it's good, you'll know what you did right. We don't even have a gender/pronoun system meta, like over at COG. Like, if you want to add that, go ahead, it's your effort put into it. You're free to write about whatever you want.
Finally, like with our stories, the general attitude over there is also pretty free. But, likewise, you're going to have to accept the consequences of everyone else being just as free as you are. You won't be turned away for being gay, transexual, hispanic, etc, but you'd better be ready for someone to call you a fag, tranny, spic, or other offensive words in jest. You just need some thick skin, and not to take things so seriously. Hell, I'm openly asexual, and nobody cares. Just don't expect them to, like over at COG.
That's it for my input, so I'll stop now. As for the story review, I think you were focusing a bit too much on the sexual aspects, since those only make up like 20% at most of the overall story. I think you may be comparing it too much to something you find at COG, which usually is a "branch and bottleneck" type of storytelling as opposed to the usual Endmaster (and most other CYS games)"Time Cave" style. CYS is very much not COG. A lot less cancel culture, in my honest opinion.
MathBrush, December 10, 2020 - Reply
Iíve added a comment in my review to check these comments, and I specifically mentioned how the school shooter part was wrong. I appreciate your feedback, and the next time I write a CYS review I will be more careful.
I should warn you that even among other intfiction people in a super prude. Iím very religious and belong to the church of Jesus Christ of Latter Day Saints and even some very tame games were too much for me. Yes, sometimes I secretly find stuff exciting but thatís exactly why I donít like it, since it also feels shameful. Anyway, thatís too much info. But next time Iíll review more carefully.
Rovarsson, December 5, 2020 - Reply
Yes, I started reading this one too but quit after the hundred and thirty sixth murder-rape. Until then, I kept wondering when my protagonist would rebel against his upbringing and set his master-scheme for toppling the Dark Lord from within into action. I don't know whether there is a branch that leads there, but by the time I quit the protagonist was already far beyond redemption.
I fully understand the difference you feel between this and a parser game. I cannot imagine coming into a room and having to type the commands for what the protagonist does in Eternal.
(I touched on this subject a bit in my review of Gateway, and Emily Short has several reviews, interviews and essays where she goes into the complicity of the player in parser-IF.)
deathbytroggles, December 4, 2020 - ReplyPrevious | << 1 >> | Next
Yuck. I'd say thank you for playing so we don't have to, but you don't need to martyr yourself.