Astralily

A promising story with an interesting concept and some intersting visuals

however the flow of the story and some of the grammer is grating at times, detracting from the enjoyment of the story with annoying regularity increasingly obvious as the story continues.

Its also of note that the characterisation is of varying quality with certain dialouge pieces oviously having more effort and intention put into them than others.

While I'd like to say that the story is well written its hard to do so with the flaws currently present in this piece as well as certain creative choices leading to questionable writing.

I enjoy this fiction but the flaws are obvious and numerous