Reviews by Hyacinthos
"Orifice Jam"
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It was both the perfect depiction of an Europian who goes to a French cuisine restaurant for the first time (no offense to any french peeps who read this review, but you have to enlarge the portions you serve on your restaurants a bit more) and that of a food critic eating his last unsatisfactory dinner.
Being a short one-choice game entry to both "Single Choice" and "Orifice Jam", it's as linear as one would expect for now, but the immaculate descriptions paint a vivid imagery on the reader's mind, pulling them into the main character's mind/POV. Excellent narrative overall.
The sinister ending was surprising but not unexpected considering the warnings.
There were no grammar errors nor bugs,at least I didn't encounter any, so that's a plus too.
Even this short, the story holds its own. There can be made more additions of course. Maybe alternative epilogues for the choice and achievements for reaching them?
Overall rating on scale: 4 or 5/5
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